Coursework: Pre-production - Script

Eleanor

2 bodies, 3 shops robbed and over £30,000 pounds of money that just appeared in my room over one nigh. She's not thinking straight. 

Andrew signs and puts his face in his hands.

Andrew

Isn’t that better [says it louder] isn’t better to finally don’t worry about the money? She is good at what she’s doing no one will ever catch you.

Andrew and Eleanor close together, E crying.

Eleanor

I don’t know what to do anymore[gets up from the chair] But if we stop now, all the stealing, the money, the gold, the clothes [she looks at Andrew] She,,, she won’t stop.

Eli

Scene 1

In the room, Andrew and Eleanor close together, E crying.

Eleanor

I don’t know what to do anymore[gets up from the chair] But if we stop now, all the stealing, the money, the gold, the clothes [she looks at Andrew] She,,, she won’t stop.

Andrew signs and puts his face in his hands.

Andrew

Isn’t that better [says it louder] isn’t better to finally don’t worry about the money? She is good at what she’s doing no one will ever catch you.

Scene 2

The reporter talks about a murder that took place in London

Lady on TV

A body of a 21 year old man was found in the suburbs of Ealing the other night with a obvious signs of struggling on the neck. The police has no suspect as for the place and time of the evens covered any tracts of the murderer.

Shot on Eleanor breathing heavily with teary eyes.

Eleanor

I DID THAT. I AM SURE THAT THAT [starts screaming] PSYCHO KILLED THAT MAN AND THE BLOOD IS NOW ON MY HANDS!

Lady on TV

A body of a 21 year old man was found in the suburbs of Ealing the other night with a obvious signs of struggling on the neck. The police has no suspect as for the place and time of the evens covered any tracts of the murderer.

Shot on Eleanor breathing heavily with teary eyes.

Eleanor

I DID THAT. I AM SURE THAT THAT [starts screaming] PSYCHO KILLED THAT MAN AND THE BLOOD IS NOW ON MY HANDS!

Establishing shot of London, the atmosphere is heavy.

Eleanor

Who we are and what we do... is connected to our character, our personality, our soul. I’m not sure what is left, if that’s gone.

All it takes is for me to close my eyes, drift off for a second and then she... she takes over. She’s capable of a lot of things but I never knew that she’s capable of doing something like that

Zara

Something like what?

Coursework: Pre-production - Shot list

Coursework: Pre-production - Mise-en-scene

CLAMPS: Costume, Lighting, Actors (cast, placement and movement), Make-up, Props, Setting.

Costume

I want to focus on Eleanor and Eli, make the costumes contrast with each other so the audiece can quickly tell who is who, but also have the audience wondering if Eli simply didn't change the appearence to build up tention.

Lighting

I want it to have a dark feel to it, but I'm a little worried about the quality of the product. I want to experimanet with lighiting, using it as props and create meaning. 
I want to use  a lot of day light as well as creative indoor lighting.

Actors

Julia - Eleanor <hero, protagonist as well as the princess (also the villain)>

-          sth happened to her in the past (someone died)

-          shy, quiet, antisocial

-          suffers from depression and anxiety

-          doesn’t want to know her family

Julia - Eli <alter ego, Villain, Supernatural (turns out to be a helper as well, the villain that everyone ends up liking)>

-          her goal is to have fun till she can

-          loves herself

-          confident, materialistic, doesn’t care about

Aman - Lang < the police detective trying to solve the murder that Eli committed>

-          determine

-          suspects Eleanor

-          first one to see Eleanor as Eli

 Andi - Andrew Riddle <Eleanor’s boyfriend at the time, the Villain/false hero>

-          manipulative

-          likes what Eli is doing

-          stops Eleanor from going to the police and confessing

Zuzanna - Anita <used to know Eleanor’s mother, villain>

-          helps Eli to take over Eleanor’s body

Amber - Zara <helper, Eleanor’s best friend>

Kuba + Norbert - <the helpers, minor characters>

Leszek + Kacper <the victims>

Julia - Julia <the girl that becomes close friends with Eleanor>

Kornela - Maria <Eleanors relative that helps her out>

Make-up

The make up with mostly include the blood and dirt, as well as Eli's appearence as confident and dark (heavier makeup).

Props

Definitely a fake gun, a bat, cars, motorbikes, money, clother and jewelary , bottles, pictures, phones etc.

Setting

London
-The room in my house
-The roof
-Marble Arch
-Winter Wonderland 
-The tube
-20 Fenchurch 

Wielun
-The room in my house 
-Rudniki - the streets 
-The 'ogrudki' 
-The restaurant 'Stary Rynek'
-'Kaliska'

Wroclaw 
-The main street
-The stadium 
-The campus at "Politechnika Wroclawska'

30 second scene

Ignite presentation learner response

1) Type up your feedback in full including the ratings out of five for each of the six categories. 

WWW: 
original content 
well rehears - fluent 
some terminology 
intriguing narrative structure
very good slides 
other settings - Poland 
good use of terminology 
very good use of social media 
     - psychographics  
mental health issues 

EBI:
spelling - spell-check !
too much on name derivation
look directly at audience 
some wrong formatting  
slideshow timing 
        - auto- formatting 
ending 

1. 4
2. 4
3. 4
4. 4
5. 4 
6. 4

24/30

classmates feedback:

WWW:
- really good content 
- interesting idea 
- a lot of terminology 
- interesting 
- confident, well rehearsed 

EBI:
- a bit confusing
- not enough terminology 

2) Use this feedback, comments from peers and your own reflection on your presentation to self-assess and write a detailed WWW and EBI for your own coursework concept and presentation as a whole.

WWW:
-the idea is original 
-the slides were well prepared 

EBI:
- better with presenting - look more at the audience 
- check the text
3) Write a paragraph discussing how your presentation will lead into your actual coursework production. Do you need to update your statement of intent? Does your narrative offer enough clarity? Is it appropriate for the audience specified in the brief? Does it fit the genre you are aiming for? Can you add media terminology or theory to your statement of intent now you have reflected on your presentation and seen others?

I definitely need to look in more detail and the context as well as content. I need to put more pressure on the drama and try to make it look like genre. The narrative needs more details as well, I need to create content for each episode. The planning can still change and I need to look at my characters more and find an important role for them that will push the narrative and create unexpected plot for one of them.
I have to think more about lighting and the character development, I feel like everyone in the class a pretty clear understanding of other characters, I focused mainly on the main one.